Sick Sentences
Sick Sentence: The man sat beside the gorilla. The gorilla comforted the man.
Upgraded Sentence: Nervously, the man sat beside the Gorilla. The gorilla understood the man was sad, so the gorilla came near the man and comforted him.
Malo e lelei Helen. I like how you started your sentence with an adverb. The gorilla showed understanding and kindness because he or she could feel the sadness that the man experienced. I wonder whether the man was comforting the gorilla. What do you think?
ReplyDeleteTalofa lava Helen. My name is Freya in room 8.
ReplyDeleteI loved the upgraded sentence. I would like if you made like a part two. Would you like to make a part two. It is good that you started your sentence with an adverb.
It is very clear that the Gorilla understands the mans sadness.
Blog you later Helen!
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Helen, My name is Jiraiya.
ReplyDeleteI like the evolution from the 1st version of your sentence, to your 2nd.
I also admire the adjectives you have placed to form your sentence.
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